Twelve Draft

This is our twelve draft and we have now got to the point where we are simply sorting out anything out of place. We have now turned down the sound of the birds and have made the fade a lot more gradual so that the voiceovers can be heard clearly. We have also removed the shots of me at the end as they are irrelevant.

Eleventh Draft

This is our film with the background music added, we decided the voiceover was too dull without music and there was also too much attention paid to the voiceover which is only meant to be an added element to the confusing images. The recording is bad quality again as we are still editing the track in Garageband. We also added bird noises at the end of the opening which leads the film on to the rest of the film.

More Voiceovers

Our previous recording had a few mistakes in so me and Aimie re-recorded the voiceover. I am the 'PC Smith' and Aimie is 'Mrs. Richardson'. We have began to edit however a lot more needs to be done.

As our original script was not long enough to fill up our 4 minute long film we added more to the script;

(after Mrs. Richardson says: Maybe you should be talking to her boyfriend, not me.)
Police: Why? What was he like?
Mrs. Richardson: I didn't get to meet him. She never let me.
Police: What about her friends?
Mrs. Richardson: I only really met Sarah Underwood and Stephen Land, but they haven't been to the house in months.
Police: Do you know if she is still in close contact with them?
Mrs. Richardson: No, like I said, she never told me anything like normal daughters should.

Tenth Draft

We have now recorded our police interview with Aimie and my own voice, this draft includes a sample of the recording which has been edited to distort the full name being spoken. Again, the sound is not very clear as it is a recording of the track as we cannot add the track so far as it is not finished.

Ninth Draft

We have now changed my credit to 'Introducing' rather than 'Starring' to make our film seem more realistic and professional. In Dreamgirls Jennifer Hudsons credit is also 'And Introducing'.
The recording is loud as we made a recording of our voiceovers so far, the real version will not be like this as this is only a test.

Eight Draft

This is our eight draft. We have kept the company names and title at the beginning but decided to spread the named credits out amongst the film similar to a real film opening. We've removed the effects off the shots of 'Leyla' after she has woken up to show the difference between her sleeping and her being awake which is not a mistake in our editing as we have added this on purpose!

Sixth Draft

After watching over our fith draft we decided we needed the make the time differences a lot clearer especially after getting people to watch and they were confused between past and present. We made the present day shots a lot slowed and changed the effect from 'Vignette' to 'Romantic' which makes the shots lighter and hazy around the edges rather than black to give a waking up and hazy effect. Slowing down the shots made the film slower paced so that our film opening looked a lot less like a trailer.

To stop the film looking like a trailer which we are in danger of we decided to have a black screen with sound paying before any footage is shown. For a test we added walkie-talkie noises over the beginning of this curent draft. We all liked this sound but we obviously cannot leave it simply as this.

After getting a few people in the lesson to watch the film opening they said the 'Filmed and Edited by' finished too quickly to be read so we have also extended the time it is shown on screen.

Fifth Draft

We have now added a new effect on the present day shots in the woods to make it clear which shots are flashbacks and which aren't, we added 'Vignette' to the present day shots to make it seem as though someone is watching 'Leyla'.

Voiceovers

We had a group discussion about the idea of a voiceover, so to help us we made a spider diagram of all the possible ideas we could think of such as a police interview with the characters mother or friends, the character herself, simple narration or even news reports on the case. We also discussed who would be suitable that we know for these voices as we mainly need well spoken people (like a news reporter etc). We decided that a 4 minute conversation between two characters would be too dull and a 4 minute news report would reveal too much information to the viewer so we decided to mix our voiceover together to show chaos. We heard the song Suzanne by Plan B and thought the news reported sounded very effective especially how the names blur in and out.The entire song is very graphic however I think this is what Plan B was obviously aiming for particularily with the squirting noise of blood and chainsaws, the news report is between 2:58-3:24.

Fourth Draft

This is our fourth edit of our second film. Before we finished this edit we had a very big problem with iMovie in which our entire footage and film had dissappeared. In the end a folder name had accidentally been renamed causing iMovie to lose track of our film, once we renamed it, it all reappeared in iMovie.

While we had this problem we discussed our film name and thought it would be better to use the supposed name of the character similar to the films "Chloe", "Carrie" and "Juno". Similar to Juno we wanted an unusual name so we scanned baby name websites as none of us could think of anything and we soon found "Leyla".

Once the Mac/iMovie problem was sorted we removed the clip of the clock necklace as it looked messy. We have also finished our credits so that they flow in time completely.

Third Draft of Film

This is our current draft for our film which we have temporarily named 'Pulse'.

We have added in an elipsis at the end so that I fade and reappear down the path. We also removed parts after audience feedback as the film was too repetitive.

We spent a whole afternoon making the credits however we forgot to add "and" before "Sarah Isaacs". We managed to find a font similar to Seven's credit font, it looks very rough and etched fitting in with our genre. We also made sure each credit lasted for 4 seconds so that there is enough time for the audience to read it, however having "Aimie Condon" right after "Filmed and Edited by" makes it seem that only Aimie filmed and edited and that it does not apply to all three of us. Also added togther "Filmed and Edited by" and "Aimie Condon" makes 8 seconds which may be too long for just credits.

We now need to begin work on our voiceover but overall this second film is progressing a lot more than the previous.

Group Dicussions & Decisions

To keep a clear difference between present time and flashback we decided to change the complete black and white to having a hint of colour as the complete opposite effects between the black and whites and colour was too different and made our film seem inconsistent. We needed an effect for the flashbacks to create the hint of colour/drained effect, so we began to play around with iMovie's effects until we found one called 'Old World' which looked dream-like unlike others which were very dark and dim and we then manually changed the colour settings and it looked alot better than previously.

We decided we needed transitions also to stop the film being jumpy as well as making flashbacks and real time clear so we added a 'Fade to White' transition before every flashback although creating the perfect timing has been hard as iMovie decided automatically how long each transition should last.

We also discussed our credits again and confirmed that we all liked the creepy effect created by the Seven Credits, also like the Bulls on Parade video. We experimented how to make the flickering effect and after strenuous amount of fiddling we managed to create it by making several text boxes for every flicker of text and then changing each text box to make the writing look as though it is moving.

Here are the Seven opening credits which shows how we want our credits;

Second Day of Filming

For the second day of filming we began at Aimie's house and filmed things that happen in people's daily routines such as a point of view of pouring milk into a cup of tea and a close up of slicing cheese which will be odd for the audience as it has no significance. We filmed a clock of Aimies which is very disfunctional and spins endlessly out of control, it looked effective however it was reflective of the natural light and when we blocked out the light it was too dark to see on the camera so we scrapped the idea entirely.
We filmed a shot of my hand reaching over a shelf to try and reach a necklace, it looked very effective as the hand is very snappy and attempts to grab anything reachable, it also looks as though my character was too short to actually reach the shelf even though I was actually sat on the ground.

We then went to Forty Hall to film shots of our character waking up in a forest. We decided to use someone from our group as it was the most reliable option so I offered to do it as no one was too keen. We filmed panning shots of the location of trees as well as a point of view shot of some gates which looks wierd as the bars move along to help confuse the audience. We filmed interesting shots such as spinning around looking up to the tops of trees at a low angle which is very disorientating. I filmed a point of view shot lying on the ground looking up to the trees which was very slow paced compared to the rest of our footage. Theres a variety of shots of me lying on the floor starting from extreme close-ups all the way to long shots. We also included a pan shot of me getting up from the ground and walking away. We filmed a shot of me walking away from the camera similar to a shot from our old opening which we liked, however as the shot is very long we could cut it and add transitions to create an elipsis.

This is the second draft of our film where we have experimented as a group with black and white and colour to show the differences between real time and 'flashbacks'.
We are still in the initial stages of putting it together although I already think this is much better than the previous film;

First Draft of New Film Opening

This is the first drafted opening for our new film opening. We decided to simply piece together our footage and see how parts looked together so far. We still have another day of filming so it is quite repetitive at the moment.
Some of the clips were not muted before uploading so there is some sudden noise.